the tables below give information about sales of fairtraide labelled bananas and coffee

the tables below give information about sales of fairtraide labelled bananas and coffee
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The tables show the amount
od
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of
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money spent on
Fairtrade
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coffee
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and
bananas
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in two separate years in the
UK
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,
Switzerland
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, Denmark, Belgium and Sweden.
It is clear that
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sales
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of
Fairtrade
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coffee
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rose in all five European countries from 1999 to 2004, but
sales
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of
Fairtrade
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bananas
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only went up in three out of the five countries.
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, the
UK
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saw by far the highest levels of spending on the two products. In 1999,
Switzerland
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had the highest
sales
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of
Fairtrade
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coffeem
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coffee
coffees
at 3
million
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euros
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,
while
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revenue from
Fairtrade
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bananas
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was highest in the
UK
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, at 15
million
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euros
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. By 2004,
however
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,
sales
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for
Fairtrade
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coffee
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in the
UK
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had risen to 20
million
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euros
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, and
this
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was over three
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higher than
Switzerland
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's
sales
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figures for
Fairtrade
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coffee
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in that year. The year 2004
also
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saw dramatic increases in the money spent on
Fairtrade
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bananas
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in the
UK
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and
Switzerland
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, with revenues rising by 32
million
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and 4.5
million
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euros
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respectively.
Sales
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of the two
Fairtrade
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products were far lower in Denmark, Belgium and Sweden. Small increases in
sales
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of
Fairtrade
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coffee
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can be seen, but revenue remained at 2
million
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or below in all three countries in both years.
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, it is noticeable that the money spent on
Fairtrade
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bananas
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actually fell in Belgium and Sweden.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fairtrade, coffee, bananas, uk, switzerland, sales, million, euros with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sales figures
  • Fairtrade labeled
  • bananas
  • coffee
  • time period
  • trends
  • influence
  • consumers
  • farmers
  • communities
  • increase
  • products
  • labelling
  • sustainable
  • ethically sourced
  • global market
  • demand
  • awareness
  • certification
  • marketing strategies
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