The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on

consumer goods in 2010
The chart illustrates the amount of
money
for consumer goods in two different countries:
France
and the United Kingdom in 2010. The items are measured in pounds sterling.
Overall
, in
comparison
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the expenditure of the
UK
is higher than that of
France
.
Although
the British and French spend the most
money
on cars, it changes in the least
money
section.
While
the British prefer the perfume at
low
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level, it is the cameras for
French
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the French
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. In terms of cars, both in the
UK
and
France
, a large amount of
money
is spent ( 450,000 and 400,000 pounds sterling respectively). The perfume is shown
the
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as the
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lowest indicator in the
UK
which consists of £150,000 only as its expenditure demonstrates £200,000
that
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is preferred by the French.
However
, people spend just over 350,000 on cameras
that
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which
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is nearly doubled in
France
in
this
sector.
On the other hand
, the British tend to buy books rather than computers, the chart shows that it differs roughly by
hundred
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a hundred
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thousand pound sterling in
France
. ( just above £400,000 and £300,000 respectively). There is a small proportion of the difference in the computer sector.
While
in the
UK
expenditure
of
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on
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computers consists of approximately £ 380,000 it maintains only £350,000 in
French
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France
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, france, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
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