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The diagram below shows information about student attendance in various schools. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows information about student attendance in various schools. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the number of students attending four different secondary
schools
 in
three
 separate years, including in 2000, 2005 and 2009.
It is clear that
 the proportion of pupils attending
community
Schools
 rose in all
three
 years from 2000 to 2009, but percentages of others decreased in
three
 out of four
schools
.
Overall
,
Community
Schools
 witnessed
a
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 highest increase in
three
 years. In 2000, Voluntary-controlled
schools
 had the highest percentage of students, at 52%,
while
 Grammar
Schools
 had just
at
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24%, with 12% in terms of Specialist
Schools
 and
Community
Schools
. By 2005,
however
, percentages of students attending Voluntary-controlled
schools
 and Grammar
schools
 had declined to 38% and 19% respectively,
while
Community
Schools
 saw a considerable rise, at 32%. The year 2009
also
 saw a dramatic increase in the proportion of pupils in
Community
Schools
, rising by 58%.
In contrast
, Specialist
Schools
 and Grammar
Schools
 had slight decreases, at 10% and 12% respectively,
whereas
 Voluntary-controlled
Schools
 witnessed a sharp decline continuously, falling 20%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, three, community with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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