In some cities and towns all over the world the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

Nowadays,
lot
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of
traffic
is causing difficulty in
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cities
and towns in the world.
This
essay will examine the main problems of how
this
traffic
is affecting
people
in the
cities
and
town
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towns
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and we will discuss the possible solutions to
this
problem
. The two main problems caused by
traffic
are
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raise
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in private vehicles and pollution. One is that cars have become more affordable for the average
consumers
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, and they are no longer
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luxury items,
consequently
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people
are using cars to go to their workplace.
For example
,
according to
the statistics it takes approximately two to three hours to reach their workspace in metropolis
cities
such
as Bangalore, Mumbai and Delhi.
Furthermore
, in some
cities
, like Manila, the public transport facilities are poorly managed
therefore
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people
choose to drive their own vehicles. These two reasons
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poor
traffic
management in many
cities
causes
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unmanageable
traffic
jams.
However
, there are several things that the
government
could do to reduce the
problem
.
Firstly
, the state
government
should provide decent, safe and clean public transportation amenities,
therefore
more
people
would use public transport,
instead
of personal cars.
Secondly
,
government
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should develop new industries and commercial areas
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the outskirts of the city. It is hoped that some
people
will move to these areas and would reduce the density
problem
. In conclusion,
cities
and towns all over the world are facing serious
traffic
problem
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problems
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these days. It is mainly
due to
of
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the
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population growth, density and poor public transportation
facility
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facilities
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. But there are several things that the
government
could do to address the
problem
,
such
as improving
the
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public
transports
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transport
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,
developing
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and developing
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new areas.
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