Your local community is putting on an art show and is a little unsure about displaying some of the submissions. In an effort to resolve their internal dispute, they have decided to survey the community. They’ve asked you to identify and explain your preference for two options: Option A: Censor the artwork Option B: Do not censor the artwork

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I would prefer that we
should
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censor
such
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submissions rather than
portraying
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portray them
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on an
art
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show. Let me address the two primary reasons.
Firstly
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, paintings
has
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such
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a strong influence on people in terms of their thinking and admiration.
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, if a painting
is depicted
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on
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violence or racism,
which
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it
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would create detrimental effects
in
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on
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the community.
Furthermore
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, it will create unwanted controversies among people, which claims to provide justification
of
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for
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such
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painting
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paintings
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.
Secondly
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,
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art
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show is open to the public, so we cannot restrict visitors based on their age criteria.
This
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is mainly because families would prefer visiting the show with their children to educate them about the beauty of creative works.
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,
by
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introducing them to
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shows is an opportunity for parents to boost their imagination, and increase their involvement in creative activities.
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, in Canada,
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classes are mandatory considering the mental development of the younger generation. In summary,
although
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all forms of
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art works
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artworks
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are essential to admire
its
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their
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beauty; I believe that certain portraits must be censored considering the personal disputes of people, and
benefits
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the benefits
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that the children gain.
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