Nowadays many young people are drawn towards dangerous sports. What makes them so attractive? What measures should be taken to regulate such sports and minimise the risks?

Sports
have so many
brances
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branches
,
some
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and some
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of the
brances
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branches
are dangerous
sports
. With that
says
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said
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, many young
people
are more attracted to dangerous
kind
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kinds
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of
sports
. What
make
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makes
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this youngster
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these youngsters
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are
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drawn to
such
sports
and how to regulate
it
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them
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will be discussed
further
as follows. Young
people
tend to search for something fun, even for
sports
. There are numerous
sports
that are fun, but somehow the dangerous
one
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ones
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attract young
people
more.
Well
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Well,
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actualy
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actually
it is thinkable, since
while
doing an extreme thing, it is original that somebody would feel their adrenaline rise. And for
thair
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their
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adrenaline to rise are an addiction to someone.
For example
, even if everybody
know
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knows
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that buggy jumping
are
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is
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scary,
but
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apply
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the buggy jumping company will always get any reservation and many
people
want to do it again after they
tried
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try
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it. 
Nevertheless
, doing
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apply
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a
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apply
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dangerous
sports
are not a
harmfull
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harmful
thing if it
done
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is done
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rightly, and
also
by following the rule
strickly
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strictly
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. By following the rule and
use
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using
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the full equipment, it can minimise the risk of any injury.
For instance
, even for skydiving if someone
use
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uses
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full equipment, it will be
save
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safe
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and more fun.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Extreme sports
  • Adrenaline rush
  • Thrill-seeking
  • Emotional experience
  • Peer pressure
  • Social influence
  • Community
  • Glamorous
  • Idolize
  • Safety protocols
  • Regulations
  • Certification
  • Equipment checks
  • Professionals and experts
  • Supervision
  • Guidance
  • Prevent accidents
  • Informed consent
  • Age restrictions
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