The bar chart illustrates how the amount of students from 6 different countries who study at Australia changed over 2-year period from 2019 to 2020

The bar chart illustrates how the amount of students from 6 different countries who study at Australia changed over 2-year period from 2019 to 2020
The bar chart gives information about the changes in the
number
of
students
in
Australia
who came from 6 different countries between 2019 and 2020.
Overall
, there was a slight decrease in the
number
of
students
in
Australia
who came from China, Brazil and Malaysia throughout the period,
while
more
students
came to
Australia
from
the
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other countries in the
last
year. It is
also
clear that
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Chinese
students
were far more than the others in both years. In detail, the
number
of Chinese
students
amounted to 182.325 making them the most common
students
in
Australia
, whilst the start of the period saw only a small
number
of Brazilian and Malaysian
students
come to
Australia
(22.859 and 19.564 respectively). One year later, the
number
of Chinese
students
decreased substantially
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from 182.325 to 167.568.
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there was a marginal decrease in the
number
of both Brazilian and Malaysian
students
.
On the other hand
, higher numbers of
students
from India, Nepal and Vietnam come to
Australia
in the final year. The
number
of
students
in
Australia
who came from India was 92.024,
while
students
from Nepal stood at half of that
number
in 2019. In 2020, there was a slight growth in the amount of those
students
. (108.049 and 50.252 correspondingly).
In addition
, the
number
of Vietnamese
students
in
Australia
jumped minimally up to 100 from 22.204 in 2019.
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