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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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There have been competing views on whether local
people
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 are shifting to urban areas, resulting in a reduction of the population in rural areas. In my opinion,
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 implies a negative impact on the economy of a country. Countryside
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 are relocating to
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 to improve their way of life. As villages cannot provide them with facilities
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 as good job opportunities and a better
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 system,
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 are moving towards
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. If more
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 leave the countryside, it will affect the small local businesses because there will be fewer
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 to help them run.
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,
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 will force
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 to shut down their businesses and find something else in order to survive. Many old businesses that run from generation to generation have been lost in
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 way.
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, a special basket made from coconut leaves used to be made by some rural
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 in Bangladesh, which is now being lost because they lost their demand.
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 who used to make it now move to
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 to search for new jobs for their livelihood. Those on the other side of the statement say that there are some positive aspects as well.
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 who move to
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 can have better
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, and some can be self-employed in the future, which will help the economy grow.
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, their children can get a higher
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 and serve the nation or go back to the village to use their
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 and productivity to do something for the
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 there. In conclusion,
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 those who live in the countryside are moving to
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 in many countries around the world, which can be stopped by creating new opportunities for them there, I believe it is best to keep the balance between village and city.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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