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The chart below shows the number of Internet users in three different countries and the world average between 1998 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of Internet users in three different countries and the world average between 1998 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar chart
give
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gives
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 information about the number of
minutes
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 used for phone calls in the UK in local fixed
line
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, national and international fixed
line
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 and mobiles over a period of 7 years between 1995 and 2002. It can be seen from the bar chart that the population of
minutes
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 used for phone conversations in the UK
into
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on
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 local fixed
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line
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lines
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 is always the highest during
the
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that
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 time,
while
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this
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 data for mobiles is
lowest
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the lowest
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. The
overall
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 count of
minutes
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 spent on telephone calls using national and international fixed
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line
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lines
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 increased significantly every year. In 1995, the local fixed
line
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 used to make calls was over 70
billion
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minutes
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.
Then
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this
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 figure increased steadily and reached
the
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a
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 peak at 90
billion
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minutes
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 in 1999. After climbing, the data for local fixed
line
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using
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 decreased
about
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by about
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 5
billion
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minutes
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 per year in the following year. From 1995 to 2002, the figure for the total
minutes
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 spent on telephone communication
into
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on
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 national and international fixed
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line
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lines
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 was 37
billion
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minutes
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 in 1995 and gradually
go
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went
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 up to 60
billion
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minutes
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 in 2002. The amount of
minutes
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utilize
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utilised
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mobiles
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by mobiles
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 for phone calls in the UK is always low compared with other types,
this
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 figure rising from 2
billion
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minutes
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at
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in
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 1995 to over 45
billion
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minutes
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 in 2002.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, line, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Internet penetration
  • Trend
  • Growth rate
  • Increase/decrease
  • Comparative analysis
  • Significant
  • Average
  • Fluctuation
  • Plateau
  • Surge
  • Spike
  • Decline
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