Some people feel that the private lives of celebrities should not be openly shared by the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

some humans believe that the private lives of famous
people
should not be openly shared by the
media
. I totally agree with
this
. first of all,
celebrities
are human beings like us and there are boundaries that should not be crossed. unfortunately,
people
who work for the
media
sometimes cross that line sometimes even not realizing but they do,
for instance
, there are many photos and videos of them arguing, crying, feeling depressed or photos where they do not look pretty, and when
media
shares it millions of individuals from around the world see that and I am positive that no one would like when that person sees her or
him
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photos like that on the internet. what is more, it is common knowledge that
besides
fans
celebrities
have many haters and those haters can bully them and even lead them to have some health problems. I used to read news about
celebrities
and roughly 2 years ago I saw an article about one famous actress, it was fascinating so I decided to read it and it was about how haters and fame made her
to
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stop her career and
in addition
she
also
gained health problems, and it is one of the reasons why I support the idea of not sharing private lives of famous
people
. in conclusion,
celebrities
are
people
like us and the private lives of famous
people
should not be openly shared by the
media
, because not only those
celebrities
would not like to see that,
also
it can
lead
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them to have health issues and end their career
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Invasion of privacy
  • Media scrutiny
  • Public persona
  • Personal autonomy
  • Sensationalism
  • Paparazzi
  • Tabloid journalism
  • Right to privacy
  • Mental well-being
  • Public interest
  • Ethical journalism
  • Celebrity culture
  • Gossip columns
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