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MANY PEOPLE ARE NOW SPENDING MORE AND MORE TIME TRAVELLING TO WORK OR SCHOOL. SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT THIS IS A NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT WHILE OTHERS THINK THERE ARE SOME BENEFITS. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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In
this
 day and age, more and more
people
 are spending an increasing amount of
time
 commuting to different
places
,
such
 as work or school. Many
people
 believe that
this
 is a detrimental development,
however
, others opine that travelling to
places
 has various benefits. In my opinion,
although
 there may be some benefits to
this
 development, I believe that it is mostly negative. On the one hand, the idea of travelling to
work place
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 is beneficial to some extent.
Firstly
,
this
 can make
people
 more routine and
discipline
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.
This
 means that a daily commute can be established
a
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structured routine, which is essential for
time
 management and productivity.
As a result
, it sets the tone for the workday and helps individuals manage their
time
 effectively.
Secondly
, humans, who commute by public transport, can spend their leisure
time
 doing their favourite activities,
such
 as listening to podcasts,
reading
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 books.
This
 would help them achieve more energy to stay at
work place
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, education centre and do their assignment well.
On the other hand
, there are a variety of reasons why I believe that travelling to
places
 can lead to some detrimental effects. The main one is that it contributes to air pollution. When
people
 travel by their own transport,
as a result
, the air becomes polluted by the exhaust of engines. Take Hanoi, the capital of Vietnam, as an example,
this
 city has a large number of humans who do not use
the
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public transport to commute,
this
 may contribute to the harmful air quality, and
this
 directly affects
to
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the health of residents living in Hanoi. The second
reasons
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reason
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 relates to cause traffic jams during rush hours. In peak hours,
people
 have to sit on their motorbikes and
breath
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 in an unhealthy atmosphere, which is polluted by their own vehicles, in
long
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 term, it can lead to many health serious issues. In conclusion,
while
 travelling to
places
 brings several benefits, after discussing both sides of
this
 problem, I believe that
this
 is a disadvantageous development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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