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People can perform everyday tasks, such as shopping and banking as well as business transactions, without meeting other people face-to-face. What are the effects of this on individual and society as a whole?

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technology individuals do their
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 without meeting any citizens. In my opinion,
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nagetive
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negative
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internet
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people
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task
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 and avoid contact with other
people
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 lots of time, money
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, they become
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independent
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not
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relay
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in
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other
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another person
other people
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person
 in future.
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 of
works
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which
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in which
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 individuals
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need help
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 other human beings like government
work
, daily
life
work
, shopping and many more.
Moreover
, citizens can increase their knowledge
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become
expert
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experts
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 in
this
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. Meanwhile, they need
to required
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 time management and priority of
task
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 with the help of their own knowledge.
Furthermore
,
public
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are
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 more aware
about
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 any kind of fraud happening in their
life
such
 as if
people
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rely
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 on other individuals
then
 it
increase
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number of
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crime rates.
However
,
doing
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 some extra
work
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life
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lives
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people
 can easily
avoind
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avoid
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 of hurdles. On the
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other hand,
people
 should not try any of
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the activies
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activies
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activities
which
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 they do not have any guidance or proper
knoledge
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knowledge
such
 as only banking related
person
whol
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who
 everything about banking and a particular
person
 of shop owners know the quality of
product
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the product
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 and price
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therefore
people
 do not
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 to do
this
 type of
task
 themselves. Eventually, they become indolent and
work
 perform in their
work
. To give an overview, citizens should do their daily
task
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tasks
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, shopping and some
business related
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work
 and many more
indepence
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independence
 without any
person
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 help
whereas
 they need
to
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full knowledge of the
work
 and guidance in the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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