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n some countries more and more people are becoming interested in finding out bout the history of the house or building they live in.

#n #countries #people #bout #history #house
Nowadays, almost all
people
 have a
home
 and
someone
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 of
this
 is interested
about
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in
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 the history of the house because in some cases they can be old and important.
For instance
,
many
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in many
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 cities
such
 as Roma, Torino and so on, there are a lot of old houses where they have lived important famous
character
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 and
this
 creates
also
 curiosity. in
this
 essay, I will explain the reasons
of
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these choice
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 and how can
people
 research
this
.
On the other hand
, It’s really interesting
know
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 the history
about
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of
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 your
home
 for many reasons.
First,
if the immobile
was
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is
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 of an important person
such
 as politics or another social class, the value of
home
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the home
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 can increase when you want to sell
them
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it
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.
For instance
, my great friend has an incredible building and he had discovered
to read
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by reading
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 books that some
romans
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Romans
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 engineers had
design
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 a beautiful picture in your bedroom. In my opinion, the reasons to research the information about your
home
 depends on your curiosity but for many
people
 may be
an
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obsessive.
However
, to achieve the purpose, it’s necessary
read
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 a lot of information
above all
in
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 history because you must discover ancient societies and you can attribute the values of
home
.
Furthermore
, some rich
people
 live in old houses because they
are loving
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love
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 the arts and any pictures that were
to draw
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drawn
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 by famous
artist
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artists
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. It’s easy to know how was draw the picture because there is a written
To Sum up
, there are a lot of causes why
people
 do research, to get possible emotions or precious things. Investigations can be easily done by using past residents or historical information and
community
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 can use
the
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metal detectors as well.
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