Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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some individuals think that permitting young ones to make their own preferences on their

day to day

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issues (like meals, clothing and pleasure) there is a possibility of

this

resulting in a community of persons who only think about their personal desires

whereas

others

also

opine that, it is essential for kids to decide on agendas that relates to them. I believe it is good to allow teenagers to make their own choices that

pertains

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to them and the following

ensuing

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paragraphs will discuss both instances. On the one hand, giving

children

the liberty to decide on what they want to eat, wear and the kind of entertainment they want to engage in makes them selfish and unaccountable for their actions.

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youngsters will feel superior over their peers as they grow and would not like to take

advices

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or counsel from others since they have always had the sole privilege to

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their choices without interference.

For instance

, in a family where

these kind

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of

children

are raised, parents would have to work extra hard to provide for the kids because the young ones decide on what they want and not what the family can afford.

On the other hand

, it is

also

argued by some people that

children

should be permitted to take stances only

matters

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that concern them which I concur with. When young

children

take

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make

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choices on matters

such

as their future careers, education etc they can be guided by their parents, elder siblings, family, teachers and significant others and

this

will make the

children

accountable, responsible and take mentorship which will in the long run benefit themselves, the society and the world at large.

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Mr. Sefa Kayi said he was mentored by his mother when he decided to take up a future career in Journalism and she helped nurture his passion

hence

his success and impact in the world of Broadcasting and Journalism.

To conclude

, as it is agreed by some persons that young individuals should be given the mandate to decide on their preferences

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their daily matters, other

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suggests they should be allowed to only

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decisions relating to them which I share in that opinion, will save our community of greedy individuals and make our young adults have a sense of responsibility and accountability.