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Some children can learn more efficiently by watching TV. Therefore, children should watch TV regularly both in school and at home?

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In the latest thread of technology, there is discussion around efficient children's discipline via
TV
 at various places. Lack of exceptional teaching
way
 and low amount of information can be the main problems of
such
 a
way
 to get
knowledge
. But in another hand, it can be quite simple to dive into a science field and explore new. First of all, at a young age must get a basic education in all areas and each of them needs to
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 method of learning. Television can give basic study, but it cannot guarantee the quality of experience,
due to
 a lack of individual coordination.
For example
, pupils may collect new
knowledge
 faster than others. That will cause him to get bored. In that
way
, he wants to learn deeper. The next main argument is a low amount of information. Any
TV
 program has schedules and a limitation of time. In that
way
, channels can not give the proper volume of theory, or they need to compress fully, which can be misunderstandable for auditory. Opposite of
this
, books can give more variety of experience and they feel free to fill pages with any content. Specifical channels like Discovery and BBC are oriented to share wide
knowledge
 around a chosen topic. It can be good for learners. But
due to
 age category, they cannot be massively involved in educational
TV
 series.
Although
 books' capacity for information is comparable with
TV
 channels, scheduling on television can break interest. Despite of significant volume of
knowledge
 in
TV
 programs it has limitations in time and lacks individual coordination. Watching
TV
 supports traditional education and it can be helpful
while
 exploring new horizons of science.
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