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More and more countries are making university education completely free for their citizens. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

#countries #university #education #citizens #development
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In today's World,
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access to
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basic information is too easy with the help of science and technology
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 as by using the internet and chatbots.
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people
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 can easily reach the basic information from these resources, the more complex information
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 as natural sciences and engineering can only be reachable from the educational facilities which are universities in many
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, with the modernized and financially stable
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, more and more
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 are making
university
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education
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 completely free for their citizens which will push science,
education
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 levels and technology to
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higher and more advanced levels for all humanity.
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, with
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 free
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education
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, the
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 who do not have any financial resources to spare for
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higher
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 but have a brilliant
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 can have an opportunity to prove their
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generosity
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, in Turkey, most of the universities are free and with
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education
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,
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committed and intelligent
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 can improve themselves, their
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 and even the World. The Nobel Prize winner Prof. Sancar is the biggest example of
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, but with the free
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 he was able to reach
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the highest point in his major.
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,
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 the life quality, the advancement in science and technology in these
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 will increase simultaneously with
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education
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 movement, there are some disadvantages
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for the
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. As a disadvantage, since
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higher
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 is free, some
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 tend to abuse
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 opportunity to escape from their other responsibilities to their
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, in Turkey again, some
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graduated from
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high school register to
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free universities in order to only look like "
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students
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" but not to be
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fully "
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" since the
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 have
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 free healthcare advantage from the government without paying any taxes.
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, the
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 in Turkey do not have to fulfill the limited-time military service until they finish their
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 which is another advantage abusement is used by some
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. With respect to these examples, the
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 are suffering from insufficient income from taxes and
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 amount of soldiers to defend the frontiers of the country which turns
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 a disadvantage for these
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. In conclusion,
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 there are various advantages of making
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education
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 completely free
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 as developing the whole country and humanity, there are some
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 who are going to use
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 advantage for selfish purposes which causes some disadvantages for the
governments
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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