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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #house #research
In today's time, it has
come
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 to trend that many communities are fond of finding out the history of the
place
 they are living in. In
this
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i
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 will try to depict the reasons
to
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this
 including possible measures by which finding
history
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the history
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 of a house gets easier. First of all, many people take finding
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the history
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 of the
place
 they live in or are
planing
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planning
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 to as a hobby
this
 adds up to the joys of living at that
place
.
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 to
this
 finding
about
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 the past where one lives becomes crucial for safety purposes as well.
Furthermore
, It can
also
 help the seller
while
 selling the building
for example
, if the ex-resident of the house is a famous celebrity
then
 providing
this
 as
an additional information
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while
 selling it can get sold in more cost.
Secondly
, if
i
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 talk
abount
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about
 the ways which can help one in finding about the
place
,
then
 the most popular one is through
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the internet
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internet
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 as
its
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 most
feasable
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feasible
.
However
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 from my point of
view
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view,
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i
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I
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 would prefer getting information from the neighbourhood as they live close
by
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 the
place
.
however
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 it's difficult to get full information from neighbours in some cases still it can provide more data as compared to websites. In conclusion, I think
this
 is just
as
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a hobby for many citizens.
Although
 should be taken as a primary task when thinking of
to live
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 in a
place
, specifically for safety purposes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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