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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart depicts how many American families by their yearly
income
 in three different years (2007, 2011, and 2015).
Overall
,
household
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a household
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 with $75,000-$99,999
income
 was the lowest throughout the period.
On the other hand
, those whose
income
were
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 above one hundred thousand dollars
become
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 the only one that reached above 30
millions
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million
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 residences.
To begin
 with, in 2007, 2011, and 2015 the amount of
family
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families
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 with $75,000-$99,999 revenue was almost the same at slightly
bellow
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below
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 15
millions
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million
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. These were smaller
compare
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 to the other domestic type which remained around 20
millions
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million
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 to 33
millions
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million
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.
Compare
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Compared
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 to the other
type
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types
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 of households, those with more
than100k
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than
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a dollars
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dollars
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dollar
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 yearly
income
 peaked the highest at around 30
millions
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million
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. the other two competitors which
was
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were
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 $25k-$49.k and
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below
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twenty five
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 thousand
was
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peaked at around 28,000,000 and 30,000,000 respectively both in 2011. Another type of
income
 namely $50k-$74k slightly stable during the period with
average
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an average
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20
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of 20
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millions
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million
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 families.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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