Chart shows the percentages of tourists to a holiday resort in Australia

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The pie chart shows the percentage of people who travel in

Australia

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continents

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continent

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Asia

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the US

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, Europe and others.

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, the table gives information to these

tourists

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about

average

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the average

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length of stay, most popular accommodation and main activity at a particular holiday resort in

Australia

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, These

tourists

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who came from

Asia

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and the United States registered the largest figure,

while

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those from Europe and others recorded the smallest number. Most European and American

tourists

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stayed an average of 2 weeks and Asian and American

tourists

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were into

useing

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using

4 or

5 star

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5-star

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hotels and went sightseeing. The

Asia

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and US continents had the highest percentage of

tourists

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Australia

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for

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percent

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per cent

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and 35

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percent

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per cent

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just 18

percent

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of European

tourists

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went to

Australia

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and that figure in other groups was 10

percent

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. From the table, Asian

tourists

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stayed an average of 7 days. Those Europeans and

American

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Americans

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stayed longest at 16 days and 14 days. People from

Asia

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and America were big fans of 4 or

5 star

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5-star

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hotels and went sightseeing. Meanwhile European and

others group

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other groups

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were rather Camping and caravan

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water-related activities than sightseeing.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, asia, tourists, percent with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

192 words

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Chart shows the percentages of tourists to a holiday resort in Australia

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