Chart shows the percentages of tourists to a holiday resort in Australia

Chart shows the percentages of tourists to a holiday resort in Australia
The pie chart shows the percentage of people who travel in
Australia
by
continents
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continent
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:
Asia
,
US
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the US
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, Europe and others.
Besides
, the table gives information to these
tourists
about
average
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the average
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length of stay, most popular accommodation and main activity at a particular holiday resort in
Australia
.
Overall
, These
tourists
who came from
Asia
and the United States registered the largest figure,
while
those from Europe and others recorded the smallest number. Most European and American
tourists
stayed an average of 2 weeks and Asian and American
tourists
were into
useing
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using
4 or
5 star
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5-star
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hotels and went sightseeing. The
Asia
and US continents had the highest percentage of
tourists
to
Australia
for
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at
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37
percent
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per cent
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and 35
percent
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per cent
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.
While
just 18
percent
of European
tourists
went to
Australia
and that figure in other groups was 10
percent
. From the table, Asian
tourists
stayed an average of 7 days. Those Europeans and
American
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Americans
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stayed longest at 16 days and 14 days. People from
Asia
and America were big fans of 4 or
5 star
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5-star
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hotels and went sightseeing. Meanwhile European and
others group
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other groups
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were rather Camping and caravan
as well as
water-related activities than sightseeing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, asia, tourists, percent with synonyms.
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