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It is thought by some that a school teachers role is to motivate and inspire students. However, other people believe that a teachers primary role is to pass on knowledge . What do you think is the role of a teacher?

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Nowadays a lot of people prefer e-
books
instead
 of
books
.
However
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 there
is
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are
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 people who didn’t change their opinion and they think that boils
is
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are
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 much better. One of the main advantages of ebooks is that you don’t
need
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 spend money on
books
 you just buy
device
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devices
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 and install whatever you want.
Moreover
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 it is better for ecology because it prevents deforestation. On the
another
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other
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 hand is vibe. It’s awesome
felling
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feeling
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 when you open a new book.
This
 smell and difficult to turn over pages. It’s
especial
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.
Furthermore
,
book
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 hasn’t
charge
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 you can read for infinity
while
 in the ebook in a long
trip
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 it
can
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just doesn’t work because of no wire.
To conclude
, I want to say that for me
books
 are much better. It doesn’t make sense that
summary
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the summary
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 of advantages is equal. Vibe is the most important for me in
books
. I read for pleasure. Money for me is not
problem
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a problem
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 in
this
 question.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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