Nowadays more and more people have access to the Internet. But constant availability of any information worsens people's memory and critical thinking skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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lives with
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development of technology and worldwide
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. Proceeding from
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an opinion exists that
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can worsen memorability and the ability to analyze
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. I completely agree
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the above-mentioned point of view
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the reasons marked hereinafter. First of all, news channels often use psychological techniques when they tell three things where only two of
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will be true or easily verifiable
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with which listeners will agree 100%.
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, the third thought would be false or without evidence, so
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would
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to the impossibility of verification and human psychology.
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, in the nineties on
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they said that butter is harmful, and it is necessary to use margarine,
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a few years later it turned out that all
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a lie.
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, thanks to
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manipulation
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will start
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news without the thought of being cheated. Another important thing is
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vassalage to the "fast" joy hormones that come from scrolling through videos. The advent of services like Reels and Shorts has provided a way for the human body to simply get dopamine, and the brain quickly becomes addicted to it.
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people
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start forgetting
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, cannot focus or even learn something.
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“451 degrees Fahrenheit”
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were so dependent on television that they did not even hear the alarms when the atomic bomb was dropped on the city.
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, the rise of platforms offering quick bursts of joy-inducing videos has created a dependency on dopamine and
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addiction to instant gratification hinders our ability to retain
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, concentrate, and learn. In conclusion, it can be said that the rise of short, joy-inducing video platforms has created a dangerous dopamine addiction that reduces our ability to retain
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, which
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contributes to the risk of inadvertently trusting manipulated news.
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, I believe that it is crucial to combat the negative effects of the "fast" joy hormones and always think straight.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diminishes
  • shallow processing
  • critical evaluation
  • misinformation
  • unprecedented
  • discerningly
  • intellectual laziness
  • interactive content
  • problem-solving
  • actively engaged
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