The diagram below gives the information about the Hawaiian island chain in the centre of the Pacific Ocean.

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The chart provides the stages of forming

Hawaiian

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the Hawaiian

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island chain in the Pacific Ocean.

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, the process of creating

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Hawaii took a long time and went through various stages before they became what we know them to be nowadays. It is marked that the chain began to form almost 80 million years ago on solid dense rock. The formation is initiated about 2883

kilometers

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down near

core

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the core

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of the Earth. About the same distance

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movements of tectonic plates ‘Hot spot’ existed which erupted the material called “magma” and spume remained static respectively.

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way magma spume was formed.

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numerous eruptions took place which

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volcano

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the volcano

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until it

risen

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rose

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above ocean level.

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, eruptions stopped as the Pacific tectonic plate has been moving to the

north – west

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north–west

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direction about 7-9

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centimetres

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per

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year and close magma spume. There were eight major islands formed in the Pacific Ocean – Niihau, Kauai, Oahu, Molokai, Lanai, Maui,

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and Kahoolawe

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which are 0-100

kilometers

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kilometres

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away from each other.

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