The chart below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the figures for imprisonment in

five countries between 1930 and 1980. Write a report for

a university, lecturer describing the information shown

below.
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The graph presented the number of
imprisonment
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in five
countries
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between 1930 and 1980. The
countries
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being observed were Great Britain, Australia, New Zealand, the United States and Canada. In general, all of the
countries
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experienced a fluctuation in the figures for
imprisonment
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between 1930 and 1980. Only in Great Britain, the figures consistently increased from year to year. Both Australia and New Zealand had a similar pattern where the number of imprisonments dropped significantly from 1980 to 1950 before rising steadily from 1960 to 1970. The only difference between the two
countries
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happened in 1980 as the figures for
imprisonment
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in Australia dropped to 50
while
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it rose to 85 in New Zealand.
Furthermore
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, the fluctuation
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happened in the United States on a yearly basis and got to its highest
point
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in 1980.
However
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, Canada had an interesting pattern where there was a gradual decrease from 1930 to 1980, showing a different pattern compared to the other four
countries
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. Across all of the five
countries
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, the most fluctuation happened in the United States. It started at 100
imprisonment
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in 1980 and increased to 130 in 1940. Interestingly, the number dropped the following year back to around 100.
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, it went up again to around 110 before dropping to its lowest
point
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at 90 in 1970. After hitting its lowest
point
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, it increased significantly to its highest
point
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at 130 in 1980.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words imprisonment, countries, point with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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