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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #person #culture #character #choice #clothes
" talk about the
culture
 of anybody
according to
 their dress and
clothes
, that they choose them
crediable
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credible
creditable
 too much" is some
people
's thought. In my opinion, it can be originated of their
culture
,
likewise
 the method of living in these days. In
fact
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clothes
 and
culture
 have
had been
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a
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complicated communication
together
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. Consistently. Despite,
this
 communication impacted
of
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modern
life
. On the one hand, these days, communication between
personality
 and
culture
 is not ignorable. So, the character of
person
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a person
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 is undergoing change.
Hence
, having
the
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 mechanical
life
is increased
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the
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people
's hurry to commute
at
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to
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 work, so they prefer to put
the
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on the
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 kind of
clothes
 that are suitable for them at work,
likewise
related
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relates
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 to their
personality
.
For instance
,
boss's
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the boss's
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clothes
differs
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differ
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 from the waiters in an office. It is that
,
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 the boss could not put a casual
clothes
,
in
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that
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which
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, will be unsuitable for his position.
Fom
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From
 my point of view, dressing
the
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in the
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 kind of
clothes
 can be related to
personality
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the personality
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 and character of a person in his or her position in society, that it is a
hobite
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habit
.
On the other hand
, some
people
 believe protecting their
culture
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cultural
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clothes
 is a main task for them, particularly, when they are living among different
culture
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cultures
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. It is that
,
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 they think
Design
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the Design
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 of the local
clothes
 is a way to
demonstration
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 the
ancestors
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ancestor's
ancestors'
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thought
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thoughts
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.
As well as
,
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 they tend to utilize their
clothes
 in developing the
people
's keen to
serves
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serve
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 to
rise
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raise
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 their awareness about
culture
.
However
,
this
 way is beneficial, but some of them are not comfortable and suitable in different
situation
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situations
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. It
has
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 contrasted by modern
life
 and ancient
life
. As you know, some children of these
people
 do not like
dress
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to dress
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local
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in local
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clothes
, just because of their sporty or artistic and stuff like
this
personality
. In my opinion, the identification of
people
's character
according to
 their
clothes
 is a predictable factor,
likewise
 not recognizable. In conclusion, it is true that
choice
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the choice
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clothes
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of clothes
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 for everyone can help
the
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apply
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other
people
 to increase their awareness about their
personality
, but it
is not be
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 a certain way or factor, by
reasont
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reason
 of,
the
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apply
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personality
 and choice
clothes
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of clothes
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is
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are
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 related to
kind
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the kind
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 of pupils lifestyle
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