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Some people think healthcare should be free for everyone. Others think that people should pay for their medical costs themselves. Discuss both and give your opinion.

It is considered by some public should deserve cost-free medical maintenance,
whereas
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 others claim that they should pay for their medical
facilities
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.
This
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 essay will explore both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to why I believe that
people
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 should pay for their medical costs. On the one hand, since healthcare is one of the rudimentary needs of the population, it should be cost-free for individuals. If
people
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 are provided
all
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 the
health
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facilities
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 to improve their
health
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, they may care about their
health
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 and they may not suffer from serious life-threatening diseases
such
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 as malignancies and cardiovascular diseases in society.
As a consequence
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, all the nations will be able to have healthy lifestyles and they will contribute a significant portion of
economy
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 in the world.
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, since all medical accesses are free in most Western countries, most populations have good physical and psychological conditions, and they provide their energy to the government until their very old age.
On the other hand
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, most individuals are suffering from serious illnesses
due to
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behaviors
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 and habits
such
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 as drinking alcohol, smoking, and having unhealthy diets.
Therefore
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, if
people
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 need to pay for their
health
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 maintenance, they may more care about their
health
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 conditions since they have to direct
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money
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 to other purposes
such
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 as education.
Secondly
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, if
people
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 spend their
money
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 on their medications , it would
extremely
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 beneficial to the government and hospitals because they can improve medical
facilities
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further
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 by investing that
money
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. In conclusion,
although
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 healthcare
facilities
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 should be free for the population, accessing healthcare by paying
money
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 is
of
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paramount for the public. In my opinion, human beings should spend
money
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 on their medical purposes.

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