today's society provides people with various ways to lose weight .Many believe that poor food and today's lifestyle should be addressed first. What is your opinion?

Nowadays there are different ways to reduce
weight
but most people believe avoiding
the
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fast
food
and
lifestyle
the
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main way to lose
weight
. I personally with
this
statement.
To begin
with, various methods to reduce
weight
are
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appear
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appeared
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in
recent
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the recent
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past.
However
,
avoid
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avoiding
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eating poor
food
such
as junk
food
is significant to
reduce
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reducing
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weight
due to
this
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these
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meals
full
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are full
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of carbs and fat which increase
the
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weight
.
On the other hand
, it is without
nutrition
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nutritional
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value
this
leads to feel hunger and eat more and more.
For instance
, the survey done in 2023
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at Sultan Qaboos University showed that 60% of overweight people
becoming
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become
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fit when they avoid eating fast meals.
Therfore
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Therefore
, it means logic that
the
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heathy
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healthy
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food
is
priority
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a priority
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and strongly affects
to reduce
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reducing
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weight
.
Secondly
, before using any other way to
change
weight
the
lifestyle
should
be
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be changed
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change
first because
individual
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an individual
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spend
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spends
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most of his / her day at home playing or watching
Tv
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TV
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and eating junk
food
without any activity to help
getting
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get
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fitness.
In other words
,
individual
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individuals
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need to
change
their priority
instead
of spending the day playing or watching
Tv
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TV
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out
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apply
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door
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activities are
require
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required
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such
as running or swimming
and
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apply
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.
According to
my friend Fatma her
weight
change
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changes
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from 100k to
65 k
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65k
just when she
change
her
lifestyle
and
piking
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makes
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healthy choices. In conclusion,
although
there are many ways of reducing
weight
, I believe the best way is to live a healthy
lifestyle
by adding spoor to patterns live and avoiding poor
food
which
are
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without any benefit and full of fat .
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  • obesity
  • nutritious
  • sedentary
  • caloric intake
  • processed foods
  • metabolism
  • dietary habits
  • physical exercise
  • regulations
  • sustainable weight loss
  • emotional eating
  • health campaigns
  • lifestyle choices
  • junk food
  • portion control
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