Some believe that advances in technology are increasing the gap between rich and poor while others think the opposite is happening. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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of all, I intend to illustrate why it seems to some people that the pecuniary difference seems to be enlarged

due to

technology. Primarily, it comes down to the fact that rich people enjoy more resources which they can utilize to take more advantage of the latest technologies, as some of the

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tools cost

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amount of capital to set up and operate to a decent capacity.

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along with

the development of cutting-edge approaches, which means that

one

needs proper

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training by experts who

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substantially.

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, I want to inspect the opposite direction, which

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the scientific causes of the shortening distance between the well-off and the penury. From my

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perspective

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potential element is that the Internet really unlocks learning treasures for the group of relatively limited funds.

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, they can master real skills and crafts online without investing anything upfront.

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, they can translate those freely acquired

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abilities

to purchasing power, which leads to the diminishing

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monetary

space.

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, I think the key factor lies in the qualities of the individuals

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of the tools. Essentially, it's about the user's desire to adapt and learn. Personally, I believe that

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during the modern age regardless of

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financial circumstances. To go

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, the environment is not the focus to me, I

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personal characteristics, which I deem the underlying and

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piece. In the end, looking at

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issue from the above two angles is thought-provoking and engaging, but I insist

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that to truly alter your position in the world, you need to start from yourself and focus on the inner qualities.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

299 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

advances in technology
gap between rich and poor
economic inequality
access to technology
competitive edge
job displacement
automation
impoverished areas
technological innovations
new job opportunities
internet connectivity
access to information
empower
educate
disadvantaged backgrounds
mobile banking
financial inclusion
education technology
equal learning opportunities
exacerbate
alleviate

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Some believe that advances in technology are increasing the gap between rich and poor while others think the opposite is happening. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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