The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, an average, at one university, in 2000 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts display the proportion of spending money by students of the same university in two different years.
The largest number of their money expenditure
is
on food and drinks in both years, the percentage was 29, Wrong verb form
was
whereas
only 4 percent
in 2000 and 8 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
in 2010 students spent on restaurants and cafes. In 2000 the cost of utility bills was 21 Change the spelling
per cent
per
Change preposition
apply
cent
, in 2010 spending on them slightly increased to 27%. Fix the agreement mistake
cents
Sport
activities and cultural education Change the noun form
Sports
cost
stayed the same in both years, only 17%.
The significant difference between the spending on clothing shops was 16% in 2000 and only 5% in 2010.
There is a slight percentage increase Fix the agreement mistake
costs
of
expenditure on transport in 2010 was 9 per cent, almost the same amount of spending corresponded to only 8 per cent of all expenditure Change preposition
in
was
in 2000.
The lowest percentage of expenses in 2000 and 2010 was for vacations and time off.
The noticeable tendency of similar proportion was in both pie charts.Unnecessary verb
apply
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