The graph below and the chart on the next page show the answers people gave about the extent to which they are satisfied with their lives and what they think would make them happiest.
The charts show the
result
of a survey about the level of satisfaction with their life and what is healthy or Fix the agreement mistake
results
money
affected Rephrase
how money
to
their happiness by age.
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apply
Overall
, the line chart shows that 41-50-years-old groups
had lowest
satisfaction in their life and it is highest in the 61-70-years-old Change the article
the lowest
groups
. The column chart shows that money is a popular factor that makes young people feel happiness
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happy
while
it is healthy for older people.
From 15 to 30 years old, there was some difference between men and women to the extent that they are
satisfied with their lives. Wrong verb form
were
Male
had 5.5 per 7 Add an article
The male
points
while
the female had just 5.3 per 7 points
for that. After 30 years old, both men and women had the same score. There was a dramatic drop at 5.0 points
from 30 to 50 year- old
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50-year-old
groups
, after which this
figure increased sharply to 5.6 points
in 61-70-years-old
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70-year-old
groups
.
The column chart shows money was the highest factor that made 15-24-year-old groups
feel happy at 55 percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
This
figure went down and lowest in over 75-year-old groups
, at approximately 8 percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
In addition
, the percentage of health that surveyors think makes them feel happiness was lowest in 15-24-year-old groups
, at around 11 percent
. And Change the spelling
per cent
this
figure peaked to
approximately 45 Change preposition
at
percent
in 61-Change the spelling
per cent
70-years-old
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70-year-old
groups
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