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In some countries today, people are having their first child when they are older. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Introduction

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One of the controversial questions is that people are having their first child when they are older. The decision to have
children
 at a later age is becoming popular in modern society and the drawbacks of delayed parenthood likely outweigh the advantages. The fact that pregnancy has been more common in older women because they believe having a baby as long as possible can help them make a
lot
 of money to provide for their
children
. They can focus on
ones
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 profession to have more opportunities to achieve financial success, it is necessary for their
children
 in the future and sufficient conditions for them to grow up.
For example
, in
viet
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Vietnam
 nam
parents
 usually have baby in older because they want to make a
lot
 of money to take care of their
children
 to ensure a baby lives in a full-fledged environment.
Conversely
, some individuals have some reasons that can be given to justify the trend of having babies at later stages of their life.
Firstly
, the labour market is increasingly competitive and people must spend a
lot
 of time working for their salary to improve life and they do not have time to prepare for babies .
Secondly
, older
parents
 must struggle to keep up
their
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with their
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children
. For
parents
 whose age gap with their
children
 is
significantly
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 because they do not have a
lot
 of energy and time to spend with their
children
, so they might not be the same as young
parents
. For instant, in
china
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 the percents older
parents
have
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who have
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 pregnancy
increasingly
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is increasingly
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 high because they focus on their profession
to
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too
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 much after that they have
decision
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get
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 babies and make them have problems
about
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with
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 health that make them difficult for them to care for their
children
. In conclusion, despite the reasons
have
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apply
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pregnancy and
stable
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a stable
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 life make delayed marriage more appealing. The
things
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thing
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 is people need
toattention
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to pay attention
the
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to the
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 advantages and disadvantages
to decide
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of deciding
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 on a marriage for happiness.
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