The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009.

#two #tables #show #exchange #students #universities #europe #australia

This

Change the determiner

These

show examples

two

charts illustrate the

number

of exchange

students

from

college

Fix the agreement mistake

colleges

show examples

Europian

Correct your spelling

European

show examples

countries and

Australia

in 2007 and 2009.

Overall

, the total

number

of exchange

students

Australia

had increased in 2009, but the amount showed no change in

Australia

Two

out of five nations in Europe raised the

number

students

in 2009. The total of college

students

in Europe increased in 2 years. In 2007, there were 189 people who came from Europe to study in

Australia

then

the

number

surged to 226 in 2009, which increased about a quarter of the amount.

In contrast

, the

number

of Australian

students

Europian

Correct your spelling

European

show examples

university

Fix the agreement mistake

universities

show examples

remained unchanged in 2009, which was still 152 people.

The

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

Sweden and Germany had more

students

studied

Wrong verb form

studying

show examples

Australia

in 2009 than

2007

Change preposition

in 2007

show examples

, their

students

Change to a genitive case

student's

students'

show examples

numbers were 34 and 27 in the latter year,

however

, the amount surged to 42 and 62 after

two

years, especially the German

students

had

two

times more than before.

Submitted by chaoweikevin on Sun Oct 08 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

▼

Vocabulary: Replace the words two, number, students, australia with synonyms.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "surged" was used 2 times.

▼

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

161 words

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

4.5
band
Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people are in the favour of students mandatory social work while studying at school. I strongly disagree with this pehnomenon because parents admit their offspring primarily for studies not for unpaid labourer work. Moreover, if community services are imposed on students, they will ultimately rebel.
6.5
band
Because some children do not seem to have natural ability to learn other languages, schools should not force them to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Experts argue that a number of school pupils do not have the sufficient inherent aptitude to learn foreign languages, so it should be arbitrary to learn these languages. Although this matter has its pros and cons, I admit that I partly agree with the given statement. In this essay, my arguments will be elaborated on before drawing a reasonable conclusion.
4.5
band
8. In many countries small shops and town centers are going out of business, because people tend to drive to the large out-of-town stores. This results in an increase in car use, and it also means that people without cars have limited access to out-of-town stores. Do you think advantages of such development outweigh its disadvantages?
In the modern era, youngsters are extremely affected by trends due to which they usually visit to huge malls located in big cities and the business of small sellers is getting ruined. This situation leads to high use of transport system but people with no personal vehicles have limited reach to metropolitan areas. Well, according to me this is not a positive development and there are more negative effects of this scenario than positive ones on the community. The reasons behind my opinion will be explained in upcoming paragraphs.
8
band
Some think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Whilst a substantial number of individuals assume that a large amount of money has been allocated to repairing and maintaining old constructions, I disagree with destroying the old ones as they are a part of culture and identity in each society.
6
band
The world of work is changing rapidly and people cannot depend on the same job or same conditions of work for life. Discuss the possible causes for this change and give your suggestions on how people should prepare for work in the future.
In the 1990s, people could make a fortune only by becoming farmers or sellers in the traditional market. However, these opportunities are fading away because of the presence of technology and modernization. This problem should concern our generation, and the root causes should be identified. This paper explains the possible factors that affect work conditions and provides several options to solve this problem.

The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Because some children do not seem to have natural ability to learn other languages, schools should not force them to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

The world of work is changing rapidly and people cannot depend on the same job or same conditions of work for life. Discuss the possible causes for this change and give your suggestions on how people should prepare for work in the future.