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Some people think that paying taxes is enough to contribute to the society. Others argue that being a citizen involves more responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #taxes #society #citizen #responsibilities
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These days, paying
taxes
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 can develop society's infrastructure. But what is the most effective method for dealing with
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people
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 who don't think
same
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 way? Some
people
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 believe that giving a hand to the
community
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 is more useful and lies with lots of responsibilities. I completely disagree and in
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 will provide my opinion with examples. First of all, not all
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 are curious to help society in
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situation
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a situation
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 that requires huge
physicals
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 work.
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 uncleanness which most
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people
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 don't come to do. If
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shy
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 to
washed
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 their areas
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 roads would be critical to drive
or
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 are harmful for children,
old
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of old
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 ages to walk. Another reason
i
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 disagree
because
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is because
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 young ages are mostly busy with their homework,
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 adults are busy with their jobs. Take
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 lives for
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example where
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mostly
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are mostly
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 at home playing games rather than playing out or giving a hand to the
societies
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 for necessary purposes. I strongly believe that
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 will
take
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 the
community
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 in a worse situation for living,
people
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 nowadays have less concern about their
societies
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 for both good and bad reasons.
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, collecting
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 can play a good role
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 can be more beneficial to the residents that live in
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. To be more precise, abstract infrastructure, malls, clean roads, compulsory dustbins etc.
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, the
community
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people
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 get a fresh environment to live a long life being far from dust, disease, and shifting home by getting living problems. In conclusion,
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 it is a common belief that
taxes
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 can give the necessities that don't come from
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societies
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society's
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 involvement. I believe that responding to
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 needs has
getting
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 low over the century
where
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people
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 like to do various work by themselves in their respective areas.
Personally
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i
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 think it will be best to contribute
taxes
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 to
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society rather than involvement of human
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental
  • development
  • public services
  • social contract
  • financially support
  • civic responsibility
  • communal activities
  • engaged in the political process
  • advocating
  • enriches
  • actively participate
  • political process
  • less fortunate
  • environmentally responsible
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