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Some people think that paying taxes is enough to contribute to the society. Others argue that being a citizen involves more responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #taxes #society #citizen #responsibilities
These days, paying
taxes
 can develop society's infrastructure. But what is the most effective method for dealing with
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people
 who don't think
same
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 way? Some
people
 believe that giving a hand to the
community
 is more useful and lies with lots of responsibilities. I completely disagree and in
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i
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 will provide my opinion with examples. First of all, not all
people
 are curious to help society in
such
situation
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a situation
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 that requires huge
physicals
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 work.
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, cleaning the road needs
physically
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 uncleanness which most
of
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the
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people
 don't come to do. If
people
shy
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 to
washed
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 their areas
then
 roads would be critical to drive
or
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 are harmful for children,
old
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 ages to walk. Another reason
i
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 disagree
because
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is because
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 young ages are mostly busy with their homework,
whereas
 adults are busy with their jobs. Take
todays
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 lives for
an
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example where
people
mostly
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 at home playing games rather than playing out or giving a hand to the
societies
 for necessary purposes. I strongly believe that
this
 will
take
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 the
community
 in a worse situation for living,
people
 nowadays have less concern about their
societies
 for both good and bad reasons.
On the other hand
, collecting
taxes
 can play a good role
as well as
 can be more beneficial to the residents that live in
societies
. To be more precise, abstract infrastructure, malls, clean roads, compulsory dustbins etc.
As a result
, the
community
people
 get a fresh environment to live a long life being far from dust, disease, and shifting home by getting living problems. In conclusion,
Although
 it is a common belief that
taxes
 can give the necessities that don't come from
societies
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 involvement. I believe that responding to
community
 needs has
getting
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 low over the century
where
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people
 like to do various work by themselves in their respective areas.
Personally
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Personally,
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i
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 think it will be best to contribute
taxes
 to
the
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society rather than involvement of human
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental
  • development
  • public services
  • social contract
  • financially support
  • civic responsibility
  • communal activities
  • engaged in the political process
  • advocating
  • enriches
  • actively participate
  • political process
  • less fortunate
  • environmentally responsible
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