Online education and training is becoming increasingly popular in the business world. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the distadvantages?

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through the
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skills
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and up-to-date
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and trends
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online courses and
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training
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a significant part of improving
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businesses. By the way, even though online
learnings
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both benefits and something should have be
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, I still believe that online
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the
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good
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to improve
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employees'
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abilities.
Firstly
, online education and training are easier and more convenient for employees. The reason is they can
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approach
courses and
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from anywhere and
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all over the world, just
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internet
. it can let them access whatever
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they would like to learn even
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are at home, or access
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the most recent
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from the most notable trainers from
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of the world easily.
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the same time, in the aspect of
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, they are no longer
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their
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while
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to pause their work
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in the on-site class of training like in the past.
Moreover
, the company can
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and trends that happening in other countries from their learning.
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some points that we should be concerned about online education and
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training
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of human interaction, because of learning on the
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can lose the relationship between employees that can help the atmosphere of working
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better. Another point is stress, since online learning can
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anytime
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and
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places
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, the employer might expect their team to improve
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more and more every single time. So, that can get them more
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and lack
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self-satisfication
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self-satisfaction
in the workplace too. In conclusion, I believe that online learning and training
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more
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beneficial
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to develop
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, because of easiness, convenience and full of useful
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on the
internet
. On the other aspects, there are some disadvantages.
such
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of human interaction and
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a higher expectation to improve their skills everytime that
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stress
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work.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Online education
  • Training
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Flexibility
  • Convenience
  • Access
  • Wide range of courses
  • Resources
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Individualized learning experience
  • Global networking opportunities
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Hands-on practical experience
  • Technical difficulties
  • Self-discipline
  • Motivation
  • Credibility
  • Recognition
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