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It has been suggested that cars and public transport should be banned from city centres and only bicycles be allowed instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cars #transport #city #centres #bicycles
Some suggest that only
bicycles
 should be allowed and other
transports
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transport
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such
 as
cars
 and buses should not be used in the centre of
cities
. I totally agree with that statement because it helps improve the
air
quality
 and cycling is
one
 of the best ways to reduce the risk of health problems associated with a sedentary lifestyle. Places with
less
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fewer
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cars
 tend to have more
quality
air
 than others because
transports
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transport
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 which produce
harmul
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harmful
 gases are
one
 of the main source of pollution
for
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in
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 the
air
 and not having them in
cities
 makes the
enviroment
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environment
 cleaner to breathe. In the Netherlands,
for example
, people
does
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do
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 not use
cars
 or buses in many of the
cities
such
 as Amsterdam and Rotterdam.
Instead
, they mostly use
bicycles
 and they are the places with the best
air
quality
 in the world. Making
bicycles
 as a main transport in
cities
 improves people’s health, especially, for the
one
 who works sitting on his or her chair all day. Because to be healthy and fit men and women need to be physically active, so, riding to work or shops is
one
 of the most time-efficient ways to combine regular exercises with everyday routine.
For instance
, it is proven by a group of scientists that people who use
bicycles
 are healthier than
the
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those
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one
 who
drives
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drive
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.
To conclude
, banning public transport and
cars
 from city centres increases the
air
quality
 and I believe that making
bicycles
as
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apply
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a
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the
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 main transport brings a healthy lifestyle to the people of
cities
.
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