. IT is a better buy just a expensive clothes, rather than lots of cheap clothes. Do you agree or disagree

#clothes #lots

Nowadays

buy

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buying

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expensive

clothes

is very popular.

Reason

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is that it is worth their money rather than buy lots of cheap

clothes

. I totally agree with

this

opinion, Buy high

price

clothes

rather than low

price

dress

is a greater. If we buy

high cost

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high-cost

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clothes

, we will use

long

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a long

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time and our appearance will be high standard as well. In my point of view,

this

essay will discuss

with

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apply

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relevant examples

further

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in further

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paragraphs. On the

one

hand, if we buy high

price

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priced

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clothes

we are using a long period

due to

material

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the material

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quality

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being

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nice

also

tailoring

most

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is most

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probably outstanding.

For instance

, in my

experiences

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experience

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, three years ago

one

of my

friends

had been inviting to me

for

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apply

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her wedding ceremony

therefore

at that time I bought

very

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a very

the very

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expensive

dress

However

last

week I

wear

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wore

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that

dress

for

some

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party, all my

friends

told me

very

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a very

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nice

dress

and she

also

want

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wanted

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to buy

nevertheless

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it nevertheless

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, I told her I bought

this

dress

three years ago, she said “

that

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is a

turn up

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for the books.

Finally

, I was over the moon.

Therefore

previously I

mentions

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mentioned

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that

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buy

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buying

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expensive

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an expensive

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dress

can

were

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take

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long

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a long

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times

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time

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On the other hand

, when people buy expensive

clothes

there have

difference

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different

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looks.

For instance

, I am going to explain

one

of my

friends

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friend's

friends'

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experience

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experiences

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One

day my friend and my sister went

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apply

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the

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apply

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shopping

buy

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to buy

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clothes

because

want

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we wanted

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to go

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to some

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some

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party. My

friends

bought cheap

clothes

nice

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in nice

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styles

however

, my sister bought

same

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the same

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style

clothes

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of clothes

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, but

price

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the price

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was expensive.

Thus

, they

had been

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apply

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participated

the

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in the

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party

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same

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the same

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times

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time

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as a result

, folk

gave

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apply

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comments

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commented

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to my sister “

your

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Your

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appearance is joggers”

Although

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However

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, but unfortunately they could not tell anything to my friend about the

dress

because

price

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the price

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was cheap, quality

also

cheap not only that appearance is not nice.

Furthermore

, I would like to say,

due to

previously

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show examples

mentions

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mention

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cheap

clothes

and expensive

clothes

look is

difference

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a difference

the difference

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To conclude

, In my point of

view

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view,

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it is a better choice

buy

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to buy

show examples

expensive

clothes

than cheap

clothes

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
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17Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
55Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

344 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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. IT is a better buy just a expensive clothes, rather than lots of cheap clothes. Do you agree or disagree

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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In some countries, owing a home rather than renting is very important. *why might this be the case *Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In some countries, owing a home rather than renting is very important. why might this be the case Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?