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In most countries, animal and plant species are declining rapidly. What are the causes of this? What measures could be done to prevent this decline?

#countries #plant #species #measures #decline
A generation ago,
human
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 was very much concerned with nature, habitats that over
the
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time now is regrading because of
careless
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.
However
, most of the habitats are now on extinction way.
This
 essay will look at the core reasons for
this
 and recommend some solid solutions. One of the main causes of the
problem
 is that gun is the main reason that
cause
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deduction
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 in rare
animals
. By
this
 I mean when
people
 started using guns for hunting
animals
, it became more crucial to handle
such
people
 who went after lost species.
For example
, collecting rare
animals
,
plants
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 can be more beneficial than accumulating normal
habibats
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habitats
habits
habitat
 by selling them
in
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black
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 market. The solution is
for
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 the
shooting
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 can be reduced if each country starts making regulations,
new
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law
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 for
such
 criminals. Another
problem
 is that
animals
 like mouse that can be extinct very soon in future.
This
 is to say
people
 like
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first
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 choice is mice for their experiments, often
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 them for research purposes. To tackle
this
 issue doctors needs to find
alternate
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 way, subject for experiments. A third cause of the
problem
 is that unwilling humans are destroying forests rapidly for making development could
be destroyed
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 some
nest
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 that
on
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 extinction path. To be more precise, cities are
exteding
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expanding
 their areas by taking agricultural
zone
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.
As a result
, humans are facing
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sufficent
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sufficient
 amount
in
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 food resources. The way forward could be reducing the
developments
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 plans and
look
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 an alternate destinations
living
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human
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 living.
To sum up
, we
people
 are the main reason for the cause of important
habitats
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 extinction. You need to weigh up the pros of keeping safe
animals
,
plants
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 that
gives
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 our
life more safe
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. My view is the main responsibility for solving the
problem
 lies in spreading
news
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the news
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 about
necessity
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for
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of
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 keeping them in
out
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our
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environ
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environmental
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 zone.
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