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You live in a room in college which you can share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter • Describe the situation • Explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • Say what kind of accommodation you would prefer.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to complain about some problems with the arrangement of my room which is shared with another student in the college. To clarify, I am a medical student and I need a quiet place to meet my goals.
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, I find it difficult to concentrate
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 preparing my courses
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 several parties which is being held by my roommate on a regular basis. These parties are making a lot of noise and causing disturbances.
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, our time for studying and college programs are different.
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 she prefers to stay up late to study at night, I got used to studying in the morning.
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 of
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, I cannot sleep and concentrate well. To remedy
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 situation, I suggested that you replace my room with a private one with other medical students in order to provide a quiet place and optimum study plan adaptation. I hope
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 matter will be dealt with you as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Mahshid Ka

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task achievement
Consider providing specific examples or more details about the disturbances to strengthen your point.
coherence cohesion
To improve clarity, avoid repetition and ensure each sentence clearly contributes to your argument.
task achievement
The letter clearly states the problem and how it affects you, which is essential for task achievement.
coherence cohesion
The letter uses appropriate greeting and closing which suit the formal tone expected in this context.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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