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The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010.

The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010.
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The given line graph provides information about the breaking down of twelve monthly costs in three distinct
services
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 by producers in a period of nine years. The unit is measured in
dollars
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.
Overall
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, both sectors experienced a different trend throughout the year.
Although
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, the total
amount
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 spent on national fixed line
services
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 was high at the onset,
however
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,
cellphone
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cellphones
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 surpassed
at the end
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 of the period. More money was spent on a mobile phone than its counterpart. In 2001,
while
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 National Fixed-line took the lead in terms of cost with a total
amount
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 of 700
dollars
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,
however
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, Cell Mobile overtook the lead. The
amount
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 decreased gradually to just above 600
dollars
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 in the next year. The fund started decreasing steadily to about 500
dollars
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 in 2006 until it reached its lowest peak in 2010 by half of 800.
By contrast
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, the expenses for phone
as well as
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 international fixed line
services
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 were not much. Just 200 and about 250
dollars
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 respectively.
Nevertheless
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, the expenditure on mobile phones witnessed a gradual growth in the next three years with an
amount
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 of about 300
dollars
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 which was higher than the other
services
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. The figure rose steadily and skyrocketed to about 700
dollars
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 higher than the other sectors. Regarding international fixed lines, the cost remained relatively stable from 2003 to 2010 with just above 300
dollars
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 each.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words services, dollars, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • annual
  • fixed-line services
  • consumer preferences
  • technological advancements
  • economic factors
  • speculate
  • trends
  • notable change
  • shifts in consumer behavior
  • innovation
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