Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. To what extent do yo agree or disagree with these statements?

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Social
media
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is a huge business today and many feel it has changed the world for the better. Others feel the opposite and worry that we do not connect with
people
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in a good way. I personally feel that social
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is, on the whole, a good thing as it has improved the way we communicate.
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, social
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sites
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as Facebook or Twitter
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a medium for
people
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to talk and interact with each other across the world. The existence of social
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has exposed many different cultures and communities that we might never be able to find within our physical range. The world is an open book
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social
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platforms. It can affect the way we communicate and form relationships. Interacting with
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we find online is
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one of the ways we can learn to form personal relationships.
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,
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can find online friends based on similar interests and
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they can create a small community and they can even find partners online.
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, for
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who can not handle social
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one can lead to negative impacts.
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scenario is related to a crime situation, in which kids can interact with unknown
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they found on social
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sites.
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, many social
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platforms collect users’ personal data, often without their consent.
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potentially leads to cyberbullying, doxing, and so on. In conclusion, communication in the social
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space is a double-edged sword condition. There could be potential problems that are caused by social
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, but there are
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opportunities and advantages we can receive if we are
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and aware
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communicating with it.
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