Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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about new things and update comparison with
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buy unwanted
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are more common these days in every flat form. Sometimes viewers
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advertisments infuence
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advertisements influence
them to buy unwanted good
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others say
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advertisements
advertisement
provides information
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new
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with the second part
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because advertisements
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force us to buy anything
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. Mainly, I agree with
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, most of the
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advertisements
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base. Nowadays we can see
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advertisments
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advertisements
in any media
such
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as TV, social media, radio, YouTube, etc
hence
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, it is quite difficult to avoid
comercials
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commercials
.
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, when we use those flat forms sometimes these commercials pop up
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automatically
, so we do not want to spend extra time to watch it at the same time they use the
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algorithm
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. Sometimes it will
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for us.
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while
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, we can see Amazon clothing brand
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advertisement
which we love. Current
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advertisments
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advertisements
are more informative, it will help us to make
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comparisons
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with other brands. Those
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the important part of the product or service. Which is really
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healthy
for customers to
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their
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.
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,
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advertisements
indirectly
spen
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spend
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our money.
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means if we see some
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advertisement
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on
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social media it will influence us to buy them. As an example, some celebrity character shows some beauty product in
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that she is using it for
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gloving skin but the real life she does not. When the ladies saw
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advertisment
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advertisement
, they felt to buy it.
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side of the commercials. It has
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influence
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customers to purchase their
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. In
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conclusion
, everything has good and bad effects but
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an intelligent
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customer
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can identify what is the real product that he has to buy. At the same time they can think
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it affordable for them or
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it important to buy
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right now. Those
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things customers
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customer
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can define.
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I think
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help us to get information
of
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products
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, it
is not force
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does not force
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us to buy
products
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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