Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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belief that

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treatments

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are better than taking actual

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or going to the doctor.

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phenomenon has increased over the years and

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has opened a debate of whether

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is a positive or negative practice. In

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essay, I will discuss why even though taking

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medicine

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can not affect your health, on some occasions going to the doctor and taking

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is very needed. If

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are just having an average illness like the flu or headache, I agree taking

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like natural remedies can not have any damaging impact on your health and it can actually work.

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, some

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take teas when they have stomach issues,

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take vitamins when they are having migraines, I have tried them and they actually work so I don’t see the need to take

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. On some

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occasions

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just prefer not taking

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because of the secondary effects which can be very painful for some

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patients

, some pills damage your organs and they cause you more problems than you had at first.

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, it is true that not all

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treatments

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can cure every illness. There are some that definitely require medical

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. Cancer or diabetes can not just be cured with natural

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, they require special medicines and though they can have secondary effects too, your life won’t be

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AT risk because your illness will be controlled.

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doesn’t mean that

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who prefer alternatives should stop doing it, they can but at the same time having HAVE medical help. Everyone decides whether to try

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treatments

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instead

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medicine

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or look for professional help. But it is

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scientifically

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PROVEN that

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helps to cure

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’s sickness,

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alternatives or natural remedies don't.

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Topic Vocabulary:

alternative medicines
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health problems
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lack of regulation
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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

Traffic jam brings a lot of problems to our life. What are the problems? What are the solution?

More developing countries are given aid from international organizations to help them in their development plans. Some people argue that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important? Discuss both views and give your opinion.