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the chart below show the number of magazines sold

the chart below show the number of magazines sold
#show #magazines
The graph chart provides
the
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information
how
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on how
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 many
magazines
 (in thousands) were sold in various countries, namely France,
US
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the US
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,
UK
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the UK
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, Italy,
Spain
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and Spain
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 in three different
years
 (2005, 2015) and the predicted numbers of
solds
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sales
 for 2025.
Overall
, the trends for France showed the significant numbers in
solds
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sales
 among other countries,
whereas
 the
number
 of
magazines
 sold in Spain demonstrated the lowest point for each year. With regard to the data about the sales in France, it hit the highest point of 40 in 2005, a slight decrease of over 35 in 2015, but
expecting
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it is expected
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 to lessen in sales
of
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to
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 about 35 after 10
years
.
Furthermore
, the general interest for the
magazines
 in all three countries is showing a steady decrease from 2005 to 2025. The dippest
number
 of magazine readers are from Spain, contains merely around 5 in
number
 during
20-year
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a 20-year
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 period.
While
 the readers of
magazines
 in America accounted for just over 30 in the first year, it experienced
a
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 highest
number
 with a slight increase in 2015, and
finally
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finally,
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 it is predicted to sell 25
magazines
 in 2025. When it comes to
other
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Britain, it witnessed a downward tendency in both given
years
 ( over 20 and 20
accordingly
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respectively
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),
while
 Italy achieved to sell 5
magazines
more
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in 2005 than
2015
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in 2015
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. For 10
years
 later,
the
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British readers,
however
,
is
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are
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 likely to follow a decreasing tendency (over 15), Italy,
on the other hand
, is forecasted to stop the sales of
magazines
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words magazines, years, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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