You are looking for a full-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like say what experience and skills you have Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir/Madam

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope

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letter finds you well. My name is Antoine Huai and I am writing to express my interest in pursuing new career opportunities in the field of marketing. After getting an MBA degree, I have been working as a

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marketing

manager in a leading

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company for eight years. I am a customer-centric person and my passion for business growth has driven me to acquire good analytical and creative skills. Currently, I am seeking

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higher-level position that would allow me to take on more responsibilities,

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as a senior

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marketing

manager role. Alternatively, I am

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keen to explore chances in Fortune 500 companies like UPS or FedEx, where I could work with colleagues all over the world. In my current position, I have been primarily responsible for product portfolio design, rate setting, and new

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implementation. My proficiency lies in data mining, customer needs perception, and

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market planning. Please find attached my resume, which provides

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details on my qualifications and work history. I would greatly appreciate the opportunity to discuss potential opportunities with you. Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully Antoine

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Coherence & Cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that the ideas flow logically from one to the other, adding transition words if necessary.

Coherence & Cohesion

Work on greeting and closing statements to make them engage more directly with the letter's purpose and the recipient.

Coherence & Cohesion

Keep to one idea per paragraph, using clear topic sentences to introduce them. Avoid mingling different ideas within a single paragraph.

Task Achievement

Make sure to address all parts of the task, including providing specific examples of your skills and how they relate to the jobs you are interested in.

Task Achievement

Maintain a suitable tone throughout the letter, ensuring it's formal and professional, which you have generally achieved.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

198 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

employment agency
full-time job
industry
position level
responsibilities
relevant experience
job titles
achievements
technical skills
soft skills
certifications
training
eagerness
suitable candidate
availability
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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