It is a common belief that nowadays both sexes are
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to outward form than in the past. I completely agree with
this
given statement and
this
essay will discuss the reasons why and elaborate upon them with supporting points.
Firstly
, money is the most thing that
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to our life.
For instance
, in the past, there were lots of wars because of poverty. At that same time, salaries
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spent on food but not enough money to buy.
Moreover
, money was insufficient
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needs so they didn't think
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their appearance not only economic conditions but
also
all of their daytime almost entirely used on working. Because of being poor, they always
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on themselves that they will obtain
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life with standard living.
Secondly
, in
this
day and age moneymaking has grown up so that our life becomes easier for us to survive.
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, these days, people feel more comfortable for the reason that exporting products to
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countries
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income rise and in the
it will make that become a developed country.
Furthermore
, people can easily put on
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some clothes
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high payment without
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. Technology
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and everyone
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to catch up on trend so they will be anxious when they do not have
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things as the person
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same age.
In conclusion, appearance is important but it depends on time and your wages and it
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when you are suitable to be old-fashioned.