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Some people say that all popular TV programs should aim to educate viewers about important social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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While
 I believe that
TV
programs
 have a significant role to play in educating audiences about critical social matters, it may not be necessary that all channels have
this
 primary aim. The extent to which
programs
 should focus on education depends on their genres and purposes. On the one hand, there is a place for
TV
programs
 that are purely meant for entertainment and escapism. In fact, not every
program
 needs to carry a heavy social message.
Peopl
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People
 watch television for several reasons, including relaxation and diversion from their daily lives. Some
programs
,
such
 as comedies, dramas and reality competitions aim to entertain and engage their viewers rather than educate them.
Therefore
, trying to incorporate social content into these
programs
 may dilute their primary purposes and potentially alienate their target audience.
On the other hand
, there are specific genres and formats of
TV
programs
 where educating viewers
are
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is
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 not only appropriate but
also
 highly
benefical
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beneficial
.
For example
, documentaries, news, talk shows and educational
programs
 are the platforms where educating about social issues is not only acceptable but
also
 expected. These
programs
 have the power to inform, increase public awareness and provoke topics on politics, environmental problems and social justice. To illustrate, a Vietnamese
TV
program
 named "A Minute of Vigilance" re-enacts millions of real crimes, including scams, robbing and even murders, helping audiences to have a deeper understanding of criminal activities and the motive behind each case. Thanks to
this
program
, they can recognize some clues of crimes and avoid the potential risks. In conclusion, it is about striking
for
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apply
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a balance.
While
 not all
TV
programs
 need to be educational, it is essential for broadcasters and content creators to recognize the power of television in shaping the public
opinons
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opinions
opinion
 and
perception
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perceptions
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. They should take
this
oppportunity
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opportunity
 to address important social concerns that align with the genre and purpose of a particular show. By doing so,
TV
program
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