The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram depicts the production process of
bricks
before being used as building materials in the construction sector.
Overall
, there are four key stages in order to transform
clay
into
bricks
, commencing with
clay
digging, followed by brick shaping,
then
heating treatment, and
finally
packaging and delivery. In the initial stage of brick production,
clay
as the primary raw material, is excavated using a digger.
Subsequently
, the extracted
clay
undergoes a sorting process through a metal grid before passing through a roller.
After
this
, the resulting material is blended with sand and water to shape it into the desired dimensions.
This
shaping process can employ either a wire cutter or moulds to create the individual
bricks
. In the subsequent stage, heat is applied to those
bricks
.
Initially
,
bricks
are dried in a drying oven between 24 and 48 hours. After that, it will be transferred into a kiln which has moderate temperatures ranging from 200 to 900 degrees Celsius, and high temperatures, reaching 870 to 1300 degrees Celsius. Afterwards, the
bricks
enter a cooling chamber for a duration of 48 to 72 hours.
Finally
, the
bricks
undergo packaging before being delivered to customers.
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