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All children should study a foreign language in school, starting in the earliest grade. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In response to the fast growth of globalization, learning a foreign
language
 has become one of the most important studies to be included in a
school
 curriculum. Rather than teaching it when
children
 have reached teenagehood, I strongly agree that schools should start teaching foreign
language
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 to
children
 as early as possible when their linguistic
skills
 are still developing significantly. During childhood, most humans learn a
language
 by three methods; listening, observing and imitating the way people speak around them.
Children
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 brains have a flourishing development during
this
 stage and carry a huge potential to quickly learn a non-native
language
. By teaching a foreign
language
 study from the first grade,
children
 would apply the mentioned three methods efficiently.
Thus
, they are more likely to be able to communicate properly in two different languages faster than adults.
Moreover
,
while
 being introduced to a second
language
,
children
 are able to learn cultures
from
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 another country. It will
helps
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 them build a good relationship with specific people. It is
also
 said by many that
billingual
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bilingual
children
 are prone to be more prominent in their class compared to the ones who do not. They have different ways of thinking as they can understand
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, process an idea, and even speak or write in unfamiliar
language
. These
skills
 can be applied to other
school
 subjects and help
children
 to excel in class. In conclusion,
children
 should study a foreign
language
 starting in the earliest grade at
school
. If
children
 learn
foreign
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language
, they
would
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 strive better in
school
 or even later when they graduate from
school
. They are expected to have excellent communication
skills
, critical thinking and good-quality linguistic
skills
.
Therefore
, the earlier they are exposed to foreign
language
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languages
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 the better their
skills
 will be.
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