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The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is often said that the primary purpose of
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 should be to improve
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people
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lives
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 has advanced for many reasons throughout human history but it seems as though much of its relentless drive forwards has been powered by the quest to improve
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people
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’s
lives
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. Take medicine as the best example.
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people
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 complain about greed and profiteering by the pharmaceutical industry, there is no doubt that most medical advances have been made in order to reduce human suffering, improve
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people
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’s quality of life, and even extend
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 so that
people
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 can live relatively comfortably into old age. From insulin to eyeglasses, medical
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 has sought to eliminate health problems and improve
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’s
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 and
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 should continue into the future. Beyond that, there are of course many other ways that
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 has helped
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. It is easy to take it for granted, but the development of technology has mostly been for
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 purpose as well. Some rightly complain about governments spying and businesses profiting, but devices like laptops and tablets have certainly helped
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. They allow average
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 to start businesses and they allow disabled
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 to do amazing things that they would
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 have struggled to achieve. Not all technology is beneficial and not all of it is created for
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 altruistic purposes, but much of it is and its development should be fostered with
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 lofty aims.
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, scientists should keep
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 in mind as they push forward with the creation of AI. In conclusion, there are many reasons why
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 advances but mostly it is for the benefit of human beings and that should remain its aim.
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 should continue to make developments with the intention of improving
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coherence cohesion
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grammatical range and accuracy
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Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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