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Some peple think that cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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Few individuals have a perspective that living in urban
areas
 is beneficial,
however
, others suggest spending their
life
 in rural
areas
.
Life
 in
cities
 is quite different, busy and artificial,
while
life
 in the countryside is pure and traditional. But they both have their own benefits
as well as
 negative impacts. In my perspective, spending your
life
 in towns develops your personality and
also
 keeps you updated,
also
 it provides many job opportunities and cultural experiences. To commence with, it is a modern era and
people
 are trying to pursue modernism by shifting themselves to developing
cities
 because it may give them many opportunities like excellent educational institutions, jobs, healthcare and many other facilities.
For instance
,
according to
 the research of census of India, nearly 55% of their population migrated to the developing
cities
 in 2022 and around 49% of them are settled adequately.
Hence
, almost every individual is urged to move towards urban
areas
 to improve their lifestyle.
On the other hand
, every place has its own cultural and traditional values, so
life
 in the countryside has an impressive culture which links to healthy lifestyles,
also
 rural
areas
 have a pure and natural
life
, because there is no rush and noise pollution which is caused by traffic. To cite an example,
according to
 the research of the students of the health sciences department, the
people
 living in villages are 30% more healthier than
people
 living in
cities
, (they have many health issues
due to
 pollution).
To conclude
,
life
 in the village is calmer, more natural and healthier because everything is pure and nothing is artificial there, but these
people
 are deprived of modern technologies,
While
 city
life
 is artificial but has many modern advantages which are helpful for us to build our future.
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Task Response
Ensure a balanced discussion of both views before presenting your own. While you have discussed urban and rural living, stressing on the benefits and disadvantages of each would enhance the depth of your discussion.
Task Response
Aim to provide more specific examples and data to strengthen your argument. For instance, besides citing research outcomes, mention details about how these studies were conducted or provide vivid examples that highlight the contrasts between urban and rural living.
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For coherence and cohesion, try to link your ideas more smoothly between paragraphs. Transition sentences at the end of each paragraph leading into the next topic can enhance the flow of your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Integrate a variety of linking phrases and cohesive devices throughout your essay. Though your essay has logical structure, diversifying your use of connectors will improve the readability and coherence of your text.

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