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The table give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in london and sydney during the same weekend in december 2018.

The table give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in london and sydney during the same weekend in december 2018.
#information #temperatures #hours #daylight #london #sydney #weekend #december
The tables
illustrates
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 the information about
weather
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the weather
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 in
sydney
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Sydney
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 and
london
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London
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 of
temperature
 and hours of daylight
in
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at
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weekend
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the weekend
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 during
lost
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the lost
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 month
in
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 2018.
Overall
, In 2018,two cities of weather information
has
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 measured by the government.
accordingly
,
temperature
 and sunrise,sunset
while
 calculated to
london
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London
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the
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apply
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temperature
 has increased in
sydney
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Sydney
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highly
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apply
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. First of all, the
temperature
 in
london
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London
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in
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on
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december
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December
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 28th ,max 29c and min 4c and
in
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on
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29th
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the 29th
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 max 13c and min 3c it increased
4
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c
 in one day.
whereas
 sunrise in
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London
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london
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London
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rise
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rises
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 at 8:05
in
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on
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28th
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the 28th
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 and 8:06in 29th,30th.
however
,sunset in evening
london
 sunfall at in 15:57 and variation between time in one minute. In sydney
temperature
 are very high when compared to
london
 maximum degree is 31c and minimum degree is 19
c
 in 30th december.
in addition
 early morning in 28th and 29th are sun up at 5:45 but in 30th sun down at 5:46,
moreover
 in evening sunset at 20:06 and 20:47 in 29 and 30th december in 2018.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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